User talk:Grave Isotope/Computing education
Peer Review for Grave Isotope on "Computing Education" by Lunar Feather
[edit]Hi Grave Isotope,
I reviewed your draft and here is my feedback:
-The draft is really good and clear with the topics you chose to add which indeed were missing in the original and definitely needed the context you provided it. -The language is clear and professional. The tone of the draft was quite formal and neutral which is a good thing for a Wikipedia article to have. -You did a great job with adding important information in 'Teaching Information- Algorithmic Visualization" in relation to the pedagogy which increased the expanse of this subtopic which the original lacked. -The "Accessibility" section was also very much required as it was barely mentioned in the original article and gave better depth to the whole topic overall. Good job with adding the element of inclusion here specially for the disabled. -There a clear mention of the situation in India and Africa which was missing from the original and the challenges they face. -Your sentences and phrases are structured well and are concise making it easy for the reader to understand exactly what you want to convey from the get go instead of having to read the whole article to get a comprehension of what you're trying to say.
Some Suggestions:
-You can add a few more countries to the draft and talk about the education systems and achievements they have as there is more of a western focus in the original. Countries like- China, Finland, UAE, South Korea etc. while countries like Brazil can also be mentioned when talking about the lack of access to education in certain communities. -One important section which might really enhance you final draft could be mentioned the role of AI in computing education and the new innovations and trends that have come about because of the recent progression in the technical world. -Since your article is about education, you can consider mentioning the transition of these courses from colleges and universities to the job market. -You can probably expand a bit more on the challenges as well such as problems in the current syllabus, issues with low incomes in teaching positions etc. -Another suggestion is mentioning important global organization and the role in computing education like IEEE.
Looking forward to your final submission after reading your well-articulated draft. All the best! LunarFeather (talk) 03:58, 20 April 2025 (UTC)