User talk:Dodarm/sandbox
Monte's Peer Review
- The first paragraph seems very complicated and could use some simpler terminology (such as the usage of the word "period" to describe the menstrual cycle and the addition of "gland" after pituitary). It is a tough section to describe, in any case.
- The second paragraph ("Neuroendocrine Changes") was also hard to read, but that may just be due to the topic. For example, what does "pulsatile" mean?
- I think the introduction under "Evaluation & Diagnosis" was very logically and clearly put together.
- Is there a physical component to the "History & Physical Exam" section?
- As I wrote to Brittany: "thank you for the clear definition of 'functional:' I think many will benefit from it."
- In general I think that the "Management" section provides good guidelines for what a patient should be thinking about during their treatment. You did a good job of mentioning what could be done for both weight- & exercise-related FHA, and I think these terms could be helpful to use since Brittany covered them so well earlier.
- Again, I think the organization of the article is very informative and concise. The reading level may be a bit high, however, and more common words should be used whenever possible. Maybe an image would help?
- You have an appropriate class and number of articles under your reference section, in my opinion.
- As I wrote to Brittany: "Since there basically was no 'existing article,' I think you made an excellent selection for your assignment and improved it marvelously."
- As a last thought-provoking question: what's the prognosis for FHA?
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