User talk:Cfeldmar/sandbox

Peer Review SF

I really think you have lots of quality information in your article. The best recommendation I have for you is to adjust your tone, because the way it is written right now is almost like an essay, rather than something like an encyclopedia. The content and references are all really good, so again, I'd just focus on changing the tone and language since you already made a note regarding hyperlinks. SeenaBerkeley (talk) 19:16, 17 October 2022 (UTC)