User:Warren/Old Mac pages
First paragraph
[edit]Lead sentence
[edit]The Full Product Name (also sold as other product name) is a personal computer designed, manufactured and sold by Apple Computer, Inc. from Month Year to Month Year.
- Bold the machine names. MOS:BOLD
- No wikilinks in the machine name. MOS:BOLDAVOID
- No more than three names in the lead sentence. WP:LEADCLUTTER
- No references should be needed as the information presented will be minimal and not controversial. Dates are verifiable later in the article.
- No market-specific qualifiers. ("sold in Japan as")
- Not important enough for sentence #1.
- No time-specific qualifiers. ("is a discontinued personal computer")
- Saying the start/end dates makes this clear.
- No form factor qualifiers. ("is an all-in-one personal computer")
- The image and Infobox details can highlight this. And it can go in sentence #2.
- No specification qualifiers. ("is a 68040-based personal computer.")
- Too technical for sentence #1.
- No categorization qualifiers. ("is a part of the Power Macintosh family.")
- The product name will include this information for the most part; don't torture the sentence to squeeze in a wikilink. Also, it's in the Infobox.
- "Apple Computer, Inc.", not "Apple Inc." or "(now known as Apple Inc.)"
- The fact that the company renamed itself 20 years later isn't relevant to a basic description of the product.
- No days of the month. ("from April 4, 1993 to May 11, 1994")
- It's just not important enough. Exact dates are in the Infobox and the Models section.
- No comma between month and year. ("from January, 1995 to February, 1997.")
- Standard per MOS:DATE.
Sentence two
[edit]- Position the computer relative to others from the same time period.
Sentence three
[edit]- An interesting detail. Something about the case, e.g.
Second paragraph
[edit]- Expand on contextualization of the machine's relevance, positioning and importance in the lineup. If price is relevant to the discussion, it can be mentioned here.
- Mentioning the CPU is fine but don't get hung up on specifications. There is space for that later.
Third paragraph
[edit]- Magazine reviews and other quotable content from the product's introduction, and/or retrospective.
Final paragraph
[edit]- One or two sentences that identify what happened when the machine was discontinued.
- If this is the final machine in a series, mention that.
- Probably not necessary to repeat the date.
Category order
[edit]- Product families, case type, processor type