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Practice Editing Here (Nov 23rd in-class Wiki session work)

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  • This is a place to practice clicking the "edit" button and practice adding references (via the citation button).
  • Mycosis fungoides[1]

Assignment # 3

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  • Note: You will be emailing your assignment # 3 directly to your tutor, however, please paste a version here that excludes your personal information. This will allow us to support your efforts on Wikipedia prior to editing "live" in the article.

1.     Proposed Changes:

“After a few years, patches can develop into solid skin tumours that can develop in any region of the body, including the face and head regions. 1 Pruritus (itching) could become associated with solid skin tumours at this stage. 1

My proposed text above replaces the following “The later stages involve the patches evolving into plaques distributed over the entire body. The advanced stage of mycosis fungoides is characterized by generalized erythroderma, with severe pruritus and scaling.”


2.     Rationale for proposed change:

This information is necessary because it provides readers with non-medical background with more a detailed description of the signs and symptoms at a later stage of the disease. For example, the initial version does not specify that “later stages” are in terms of years and does not provide a clear description of which area in the body might be affected by tumours (amended to face and head regions). In addition, the information provided is explained in simple terms that allows readers from any background to understand it, compared to the initial description that included medical terms (generalized erythroderma). The information came from the following Cochrane review:

“Valipour  A, Jäger  M, Wu  P, Schmitt  J, Bunch  C, Weberschock  T. Interventions for mycosis fungoides. Cochrane Database of Systematic Reviews 2020, Issue 7. Art. No.: CD008946. DOI: 10.1002/14651858.CD008946.pub3.”


3.     Area of controversy (if applicable):

No Controversy. Not applicable.


4.     Critique of source:

Although the selected secondary source was recently published (in year 2020), identifying and defining a tumour might be challenging since there is no clear threshold for characterization. Furthermore, the definitions in this article are based on the following guideline:

Willemze, R., Jaffe, E. S., Burg, G., Cerroni, L., Berti, E., Swerdlow, S. H., Ralfkiaer, E., Chimenti, S., Diaz-Perez, J. L., Duncan, L. M., Grange, F., Harris, N. L., Kempf, W., Kerl, H., Kurrer, M., Knobler, R., Pimpinelli, N., Sander, C., Santucci, M., Sterry, W., … Meijer, C. J. (2005). WHO-EORTC classification for cutaneous lymphomas. Blood, 105(10), 3768–3785. https://doi.org/10.1182/blood-2004-09-3502.


Therefore, other sources might provide different definitions that could lead to biased information.


5.     Article improvement:

The talk section has been updated:

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:Mycosis_fungoides


Reference:

1.     Valipour A, Jäger  M, Wu  P, Schmitt  J, Bunch  C, Weberschock  T. Interventions for mycosis fungoides. Cochrane Database of Systematic Reviews 2020, Issue 7. Art. No.: CD008946. DOI: 10.1002/14651858.CD008946.pub3.

What to post on the Wikipedia article talk page?

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  • This will also be covered on Nov 23rd in class. Your group should use the below template to share an outline of your proposed improvements (including your new wording and citations). Article talk pages are not places to share your assignment answers. The Wikipedia community will be more interested in viewing your exact article improvement suggestions including where you plan to improve the article (which section), what wording you suggest, and the exact citation (Note: all citations must meet WP:MEDRS)
  • You will not be able to paste citations directly from your sandbox to talk pages (unless you are interested in editing/learning Wiki-code in the "source editing" mode). We suggest re-adding your citations on the talk page manually (using the cite button and populating the citation by pasting in the DOI, website, or PMID). You will have to repeat this process yet again when you edit the actual article live.
  • Talk Page Template: Wikipedia:CARL Medical Editing Initiative/Fall 2020/Talk Page Template
  1. ^ Wang, Hui; Yosipovitch, Gil (2010-1). "New insights into the pathophysiology and treatment of chronic itch in patients with End-stage renal disease, Chronic liver disease and Lymphoma". International journal of dermatology. 49 (1): 1–11. doi:10.1111/j.1365-4632.2009.04249.x. ISSN 0011-9059. PMC 2871329. PMID 20465602. {{cite journal}}: Check date values in: |date= (help)