User:Bloomscape/Evaluate an Article
User:Bloomscape/Evaluate an Article
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Complete your article evaluation below. Here are the key aspects to consider: Lead sectionA good lead section defines the topic and provides a concise overview. A reader who just wants to identify the topic can read the first sentence. A reader who wants a very brief overview of the most important things about it can read the first paragraph. A reader who wants a quick overview can read the whole lead section.
ContentA good Wikipedia article should cover all the important aspects of a topic, without putting too much weight on one part while neglecting another.
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Sources and ReferencesA Wikipedia article should be based on the best sources available for the topic at hand. When possible, this means academic and peer-reviewed publications or scholarly books.
Organization and writing qualityThe writing should be clear and professional, the content should be organized sensibly into sections.
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Talk page discussionThe article's talk page — and any discussions among other Wikipedia editors that have been taking place there — can be a useful window into the state of an article, and might help you focus on important aspects that you didn't think of.
Overall impressions
Examples of good feedbackA good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved. |
Which article are you evaluating?
[edit]Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
[edit]As someone interested in climate change and the impacts of extreme heat globally, I wanted to topics at the intersection of extreme heat, public health and equity. Although some of the sub-topics are very flushed out, I found that the content describing the wet-bulb effect and climate change was limited and choppy. Having more experience exploring impact of increasing temperature in arid climate, I thought evaluating, and possibly editing/adding, the content to the wet-bulb effect page would be excellent practice for my first submission.
Understanding the effects of climate change on wet-bulb temperature is crucial in understanding the public health implications it carries. As a large portions of the world lives in humid environments, increase global temperatures can dramatically impact vulnerable communities, like outdoor and factory workers. This change can also have impacts on agriculture productions and vector-borne disease distribution globally.
Evaluate the article
[edit](Compose a detailed evaluation of the article here, considering each of the key aspects listed above. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what a useful Wikipedia article evaluation looks like.)
I very much enjoyed reading this article as it touched on more technical elements I didn't fully understand until reading this wikipedia article. However, I feel that the flow from sub-section to sub-section can be improved and that some content is lacking notable citations or content. Below are some suggestions for how this article can be improved using the guided questions provided by the Wiki Education platform:
- Overall, although the article has an in depth description of wet-bulb temperature, the practical use of wikipedia as a source for base knowledge means that more language could be incorporated to the define the practical uses of wet-bulb temperature, i.e. wet-bulb temperature is often used as a climate variable for measuring human therm comfort.
- Introduction: Although it seems some edits have been done to the article, I would rearrange the lead and introduction further to start more general and narrow in on the technical ways wet-bulb is measured. For example, I would lead with what is is in it's basic form, examples of how this measurement is applied and then dive into the mechanics of how wet-bulb is actually measured.
- Overall Content: I recommend expanding more on wet-bulb temperature and health, including elaborating more on the public health risks associated with wet-bulb effect, including heat-stress and other forms of chronic morbidity, like renal disease from dehydration. It can also be linked to Wet-bulb conditions.
- Fact checks: I agree with other comments that the "Highest recorded wet-bulb temperature" section should include additional citations the footnotes.
- Recommended additions:
- An additional subsection under "Wet-bulb temperature and health" that highlights which communities are most vulnerable to the wet-bulb temperatures globally, such as - outdoor workers, factory workers, students, and elderly will help bring into context why wet-bulb temperature is important to understand when talking about climate change.
- The climate changes section: I would move the sentence "A 2015 study concluded that depending on the extent of future global warming, parts of the world could become uninhabitable due to deadly wet-bulb temperatures." from the temperature and health section to the climate change section and expand. Additionally, the few sections could be reorganized and added under the climate change section to incorporate past extreme heat events, projected temperature increases, and the potential risk to public health, agriculture and global livable locations.