User:AniledaC/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?

Women's education in the United States

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?

This article is about women's education, including how there are gender disparities in education. I chose it because I would incorporate how culture and encouragement impacts a woman's education. I thought this page would be a great segway into my ideas on cultural norms, inside and outside of the United States.

Evaluate the article

The Wikipedia article on Women’s education in the United States focuses on the education of women in America, but lacks some organization. Although there is a clear focus, the structure of this article is missing. It lacks flow from topics, which could be arranged in a manner that is easy to follow. An example of this is where there is a sudden jump from the topic of “19th century” to the “20th century” and backwards to the “1930s.” Though they highlight key details in women’s education, there could be better transitions enforced to make the article better to understand. Most sentences that this article contains are clear. It also avoids the use of a passive voice. There are no grammatical errors made, and it is accessible to a broad audience. The article is fairly simplistic and easy to read, holding no complications for those with different education levels. Sentences are concise and straightforward, eliminating comprehension complications. This Wikipedia page does have a talk page. It provides a lot of insight and reviews into the issues the article possesses. One of those issues is how the formatting of this article does not follow the standards set by Wikipedia. Without proper formatting, it makes the article tacky and less structured. Another problem brought up is how the page jumps from one time period to another, missing decades in between. Missing information from decades is a detrimental part of this article because highlighting missing pieces of information can be crucial in showing how factors were influenced or changed in the education of women. Pieces of evidence in this article are supported with reliable references. Although there aren’t citations for every claim, the references used are credible, coming from government and historical references. When referencing historical events that had occurred, however, this article could have used a timeline to delve deeper into key elements that had affected women’s education. Most claims are supported and referenced from reliable sources, but stronger references and needed to better support the claims made. This article has precise language so that evidence is stated once and effectively. In some areas, such as explaining claims, the article lacks depth. An example of this is when statistics are mentioned, but not fully explained, highlighting the meaning and importance of the data. Expanding on this concept would help clarify to readers what is important from the data shown. This Wikipedia page does include multiple perspectives on how women’s role in education has changed. Using time periods, the article shows how there has been progress during the decades from the 1970s to the 2000s. The article, however, does not go into further detail in explaining deeper ideas or contrary beliefs and perspectives. This Wikipedia page does a substantially great job explaining key educational movements and sets a neutral tone throughout the article. One critical issue within this article is that there are implications that show throughout time, the education of women in the United States has a linear slope, disregarding potential conflicts and struggles in between its timeline. Providing more detail and clarity to areas like diversity in this article, such as different races, living locations, and economic status, is absent. Clarifications on these ideas need to be brought up on this page to make concepts more concise and clear. The Wikipedia page covers some issues of women and gender, specifically gender oppression. Improving this could be done by including resources on how different social categories are impacted within the education system of the United States. What I could add to this entry to improve it is to discuss areas in cultural aspects that influence the education women receive. I could also expand outside the United States and compare it to other countries with different cultural standards, as well as their education for women. This page could go into detail on policies, like Title X, that were not entirely reviewed. Focusing on sex discrimination in more detail, for instance, would be beneficial to improving this article. A wide variety of other entries are provided in this Wikipedia page. All of the links are related in some way and sourced correctly. Even though this is the case, I would expand on this article, including links related to educational opportunities based on culture and societal norms.