User contributions for Tdavey

3 February 2024

• 14:5114:51, 3 February 2024 diff hist −5 m Ruy Teixeira Making the sentence stronger by removing the weak "He has" and replacing it with a stronger subject and verb.

13 August 2023

• 19:0819:08, 13 August 2023 diff hist −4 m Piano Concerto No. 20 (Mozart) Eliminated a typo: "the that " in the sentence "the 1984 feature film ''Amadeus'' makes use of the that movement when Mozart is stumbling home . . . "

28 July 2023

• 20:2920:29, 28 July 2023 diff hist −3 m Pulmonary fibrosis Improved the prose, substituting the active voice for weak expression in an important sentence.

15 May 2023

• 13:5813:58, 15 May 2023 diff hist +487 Talk:Municipal device of Chicago →Suggested improvement to the photo caption: new section Tag: New topic

22 March 2023

• 18:1618:16, 22 March 2023 diff hist +23 m William Mann (critic) Corrected the title of Mann's 1964 book to "Richard Strauss: A Critical Study of the Operas"

5 March 2023

• 15:5215:52, 5 March 2023 diff hist 0 m James Cahill (author) Fixed a typo: "masetr's" to "master's"

26 November 2022

• 18:1918:19, 26 November 2022 diff hist +3 m Huckleberry Finn Correcting a solecism: the clause "who enrolls him in school return for his saving her life" is missing the word "in" between "school" and "return."

11 November 2022

• 05:1905:19, 11 November 2022 diff hist −2 m Andrew Norman Fixed a typo/grammar error: "commisioned" should be simply "commission".

4 September 2022

• 22:1022:10, 4 September 2022 diff hist +764 Talk:Nepal →What does the phrase "Tibet of China" in the second sentence mean?: new section Tag: New topic

28 August 2022

• 12:5312:53, 28 August 2022 diff hist +1 m Jacob Riis Park Corrected an error in verb tense, changing "10 acres of land was added" to "10 acres of land were added".

17 May 2022

• 17:0817:08, 17 May 2022 diff hist −11 m Spike Lee →1980s: For fluency, I edited the clause "The film filmed in black-and-white, concerns" to read "The black-and-white film concerns".

3 April 2022

• 17:5917:59, 3 April 2022 diff hist +17 m Olivier Messiaen Added Qigang Chen to the list of Messiaen's students. Chen "was Olivier Messiaen's last student and lived with him as well, from 1984 to 1988.", according to Chen's own Wikipedia article.

16 January 2022

• 05:5705:57, 16 January 2022 diff hist −19 m Fugue for String Quintet, Op. 137 (Beethoven) Minor edit to simplify two adjacent sentences, eliminating wordy repetition. Edited the subsequent sentence to reduce the structure from three clauses to two, smoothing the reading flow. current

20 November 2021

• 19:5519:55, 20 November 2021 diff hist +1 m Multiplication Correcting an error in tense, from "Such products is the subject of . . . " to "Such a product is the subject of . . . "

31 August 2021

• 21:3721:37, 31 August 2021 diff hist −1 Things We Lost to the Water →Synopsis: Fixed two errors in the second paragraph: a mistake in noun-verb agreement, and a typo (replacing "as" with the intended "is"). Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit

30 September 2020

• 16:0016:00, 30 September 2020 diff hist +1 m Riboflavin Grammar edit: correcting error in tense from "The Celiac Disease Foundation points out that a gluten-free diet may be low in riboflavin (and other nutrients) as enriched wheat flour and wheat foods (bread, pasta, cereals, etc.) is a major dietary contribution to total riboflavin intake." to "are a major dietary . . . "

18 September 2020

• 02:3502:35, 18 September 2020 diff hist −1 m Condominium This edit removed the superfluous period character from this phrase: "has become a household word in the U.S..<ref>." Should be: "has become a household word in the U.S.<ref>." The period at the end of an abbreviation (like "U.S.") suffices to punctuate the end of a sentence when the abbreviation itself lies at the end of the sentence. Common usage rules omit a second consecutive period. This minor edit makes the sentence in question consistent with similar sentences elsewhere in this article.

4 September 2020

• 17:5217:52, 4 September 2020 diff hist +2 m West Virginia Corrected an error of verb tense by changing "pass" to "passed" in the final sentence of the second paragraph.

4 June 2016

• 23:4323:43, 4 June 2016 diff hist −2 m Symphony No. 9 (Beethoven) Minor edit for usage: not "autographed score," but "autograph score" to refer to Beethoven's handwritten manuscript of the symphony

6 March 2016

• 00:4800:48, 6 March 2016 diff hist −1 m Capistrano (software) Fixed a non-sequitur: PHP is not a framework but a programming language. Also replaced an inapt colon with a simple comma.

18 April 2015

• 18:1718:17, 18 April 2015 diff hist +6 m Steven Brill (journalist) Punctuation: missing period, failure to hyphenate a compound. Changed the tense of a verb to match the sequence of tenses in the sentence.

6 April 2015

• 19:3819:38, 6 April 2015 diff hist +11 m Alliance for Progress The clause "The United States government began to tight diplomatic relations with America" makes no sense. "Strengthen" is probably meant, and of course "Latin America," not just America.

2 March 2015

• 20:4120:41, 2 March 2015 diff hist +1 m Philip Zelikow The last name of Richard Haass was misspelled as "Haas."

18 February 2015

• 15:0515:05, 18 February 2015 diff hist +1,259 Talk:MLB Advanced Media →One of the key statistics in this article is dubious and potentially misleading: new section

15 February 2015

• 01:0001:00, 15 February 2015 diff hist −4 Comparison of UPnP AV media servers MediaMonkey, a commercial product under continuing development, is actively supported via user forums moderated by company staff.

4 February 2015

• 00:0700:07, 4 February 2015 diff hist +489 Talk:Charles Ives →Sentence about Ives's chamber music contains a non sequitur: new section

15 November 2014

• 14:4914:49, 15 November 2014 diff hist +4 m William Higgins (director) Slight edits for fluency in the first paragraph. Added a missing second comma to set off the appositive "Boys of Venice."

8 November 2014

• 16:3016:30, 8 November 2014 diff hist −5 John Luther Adams "was awarded" is the more standard and neutral locution. "was honored with" is a bit booster-ish.

5 June 2014

• 16:1416:14, 5 June 2014 diff hist −18 Monopoly Capital →The economic surplus: Simplified, reduced wordiness: from "there is a tendency for the surplus to rise" to "the surplus tends to rise."
• 16:1216:12, 5 June 2014 diff hist +9 m Monopoly Capital →The economic surplus: rewrote phrase to eliminate jammed modifiers, from "under the oligopolistic conditions of modern big business dominated economies" to "under the oligopolistic conditions of modern economies -- dominated by big business -- "
• 16:0716:07, 5 June 2014 diff hist 0 Monopoly Capital →Argument: Fixed a solecism: "selling prices" should be "setting prices".

26 May 2014

• 01:3101:31, 26 May 2014 diff hist +8 Ingram Marshall Corrected two typos: supplied a missing "for" and "the" in two different sentences respectively.

25 May 2014

• 17:5117:51, 25 May 2014 diff hist −3 m Harold Shapero Fixed typo: a random "he" in the sentence.

30 November 2013

• 19:1619:16, 30 November 2013 diff hist +904 m Talk:St. Nicholas Park Advising the editors of an error on the page, which I don't know how to fix myself.

26 October 2013

• 20:2420:24, 26 October 2013 diff hist 0 m Dr. Mabuse →In popular culture: Fixing sentence fragment.

23 October 2013

• 02:0302:03, 23 October 2013 diff hist +2 m IPhone I substituted "introduced" for "revealed" in the last sentence of the first paragraph. The diction is more idiomatic for tech marketing launches.

13 October 2013

• 21:3421:34, 13 October 2013 diff hist 0 m Heuristic →Cognitive maps: Corrected two misspellings: spacial --> spatial, pervious --> previous

14 April 2013

• 16:0716:07, 14 April 2013 diff hist 0 m Forsaken (The Wheel of Time) →Osan'gar: Fixed typo. Name not "Oran'gar" but Osan'gar.
• 15:5415:54, 14 April 2013 diff hist +6 Forsaken (The Wheel of Time) →Hessalam: Correcting a factual error: Graendal is not killed by Moridin, but by Shaidar Haran. See the section on Graendal earlier.
• 15:5115:51, 14 April 2013 diff hist +3 m Forsaken (The Wheel of Time) →Cyndane: Changed "when" to "whereas" to remove inference of causality.

11 April 2013

• 20:5520:55, 11 April 2013 diff hist +2 m Marginal value Fixing a typo: "actual" should be "actually"

15 January 2012

• 16:3816:38, 15 January 2012 diff hist +1 m Personal life of Leonardo da Vinci →Leonardo's sexuality: Corrected solecism: replaced "whose" with "who is".

30 October 2011

• 13:0713:07, 30 October 2011 diff hist −1 George Martin Clause of concession contains superfluous "of," making meaning unclear. Rewrote clause to make idea plain and clear.
• 13:0313:03, 30 October 2011 diff hist +9 George Martin Fixed grammar: mixed modifiers in opening clauses. Martin's family was not "six-years-old," nor does a family have a son. Only parents have sons.

18 June 2011

• 14:4814:48, 18 June 2011 diff hist 0 m Emacs Lisp (Trying again!) Fixed usage error: "comparatively-poor" --> "comparatively poor"

5 March 2011

• 17:1117:11, 5 March 2011 diff hist −1 m The Trial (1962 film) →Release: Corrected a misspelled word: "genious" to "genius"

23 January 2011

• 19:0319:03, 23 January 2011 diff hist +6 F. Matthias Alexander →Personal life: Grammar fix: Run-on sentence split in two.

16 January 2011

• 15:5915:59, 16 January 2011 diff hist −45 m Fritz Lang filmography Deleted an extraneous sentence fragment. Added a comma to demarcate an adjectival phrase.

18 December 2010

• 03:3303:33, 18 December 2010 diff hist 0 Morning Joe →"Stunningly superficial"

8 December 2010

• 22:1722:17, 8 December 2010 diff hist +2 m John Huston Fixed typo. Phrase in first paragraph of bio "with a few years" should be "within a few years."