Talk:Won't Get Fooled Again/GA1

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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 19:19, 22 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I didn't do the album, so I might as well do this one! Will comment soon. FunkMonk (talk) 19:19, 22 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"and the universal chord is sounded." Perhaps put "universal chord" in quote marks? Since it is apparently not some general thing, but can mean several, including:[1]

I had a spin through sources, and it seems the most common definition is just as a metaphor eg: "x's presentation struck a universal chord with everyone", so I'll put that in quotes

Perhaps there should even be a very short description of what the universal chord is? Since it is mentioned several times under background.
"Inayat Khan's The Mysticism of Sound and Music" Perhaps present the person? Nationality, occupation? Perhaps the same for Meher Baba, many readers may be unfamiliar with him.
Same could be said for the band members perhaps, present each member's role at first mention?
"a new demo was cut" perhaps "cut" is too informal wording?

Changed to "a fresh attempt at recording was made" Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 12:51, 23 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

" organ / synth track" should there really be space before and after the dash?

Whenever somebody mentions dashes or spaces in a GA or FA review I hide in a corner until they go away again. ;-) Changed "synthesized organ". Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 12:51, 23 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"a synthesizer had managed to be integrated so successfully within a rock group." Wouldn't it rather be within a rock song?

Changed Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 12:51, 23 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"as the choice of single as the group felt that song was "too much out of character"." Out of character for what? The album? Could add "single for the Who's Next album" or some such...

I've changed this to what I think the original source is getting at. Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 12:51, 23 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"Townshend has given mixed feelings" Expressed mixed feelings? Or is it a phrase I'm unfamiliar with?

No problem with going for "expressed" Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 12:51, 23 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"In 2003, Who's Next was reissued" perhaps add "Deluxe eidtion" somewhere in that sentence, so it will be easier to identify where it can be found.

Done Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 12:51, 23 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"Their version of the song was released on their live album" The live album, for variation?

Changed to "A live recording was released on" which says the same thing but simpler Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 12:51, 23 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Is there anything more on why Townshend wouldn't allow the song to be used in Fahrenheit 9/11? it has always puzzled me a bit that he would then let it be used in a TV series instead...
"ltimately, Lifehouse as a project was abandoned in favour of Who's Next, a straightforward album, where it also became the closing track." This is only really mentioned in the lead, but should also then be in the article.
"The song has been performed as a staple of the band's setlist ever since it was first played that year" That year refers to a date which is not in the preceding sentence, so perhaps spell it out again?

Changed to "1971", which cuts some prose out Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 12:51, 23 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"and was the last track Keith Moon played live with the band." Perhaps mention year?

The tricky bit here is which year? 1976 (last paid gig at the Maple Leaf Gardens, Toronto) or 1978 (last gig full stop in front of a paid crowd at Shepperton Studios for The Kids Are Alright) Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 12:51, 23 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comment

One thing you might mention is the blood curdling scream in it which I'm pretty sure was voted greatest rock n roll moment or something.♦ Dr. Blofeld 13:02, 23 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]