Talk:Uniform Civil Code/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: DiplomatTesterMan (talk · contribs) 07:27, 12 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I will take up this review. I'll have a read and will message back with comments and the formal review. DTM (talk) 07:27, 12 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Detailed review follows. If you wish, you may add an indented comment after each item. Please do not strike through completed items or add tick marks or other graphics. That will interfere with my own system of tracking progress. I will be doing the review in pieces.

Lead/Intro

The usage of Business Standard for the first line seems inappropriate since it leads to text with no publication date, no update date and no author. Further, since the lead is a summary of what is in the body, there should be nothing unique to the lead that is not mentioned in the body as per WP:MOSLEAD. This particular Business Standard link is not used anywhere else in the body. The same is the case with the second, third, fourth, fifth citations in the lead. Apart from the first citation of Business Standard, the other citations seem adequate for inclusion in the body. However, no page numbers have been given for the second reference – Shimon Shetreet and Hiram E. Chodosh, 2014.
The first sentence needs some work. Religion doesn't need to be mentioned and emphasized twice. Please note the usage of replace personal laws in the first line. "replace"... Take for example what the second citation itself says "The mere existence of a civil law does not nullify the existence of religious law. […] The main law will be civil; the parallel law will be religious." Further, India's civil code has not been passed so we can't assume what it will "replace", unless you have sources for it and explain the same in the body. I will not get into the editorial aspect of this too much, but as the first line, it needs to be worked upon.
The usage of UCC is not consistent. Why is UCC explained near the bottom of the article? Please shift it to the lead.

I will come back to the lead after we get through the body. Please make sure it follows WP:MOSLEAD. DTM (talk) 10:33, 12 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

British India (1858–1947)

The first paragraph does not have a citation.
Please make the page numbers more precise — For "Anil Chandra Banerjee (1984). English Law in India" shouldn't page number 133 also be referenced?

Legislative reforms

The law discriminated — can we be a bit more specific here. Which law? Laws in general? etc The next sentence mentions "Hindu", are we just talking about Hindus here. Please let the reader know that before and not after.
which was also one of the first laws to ensure women's economic security — one of the first laws in the world or in the Indian subcontinent?
There were law reforms passed which were beneficial to women — another general statement. The laws mentioned in front seem to only cater to Hindu women. Please specify this.
Lakshmi N. Menon — this seems like an important name to link. Please link it if it refers to the person in question.
The passing of the Hindu Women's right to Property Act of 1937, [...] its report to the Indian Parliament in 1947. Please copyedit this paragraph.
The last paragraph deals with the Special Marriage Act [...] first enacted in 1872 and the Special Marriage (Amendment) Act, 1923. Why is this last? Arent't we going roughly chronologically? Couldn't it be placed before the paragraph mentioning the AIWC conference in 1933?

Hindu Code Bill and addition to the Directive Principles

Citations 18 and 19 (following the line Ambedkar recommended the adoption of a Uniform Civil Code) are not formatted with correct detailing.
Citation 18, "Ambedkar And The Uniform Civil Code" by Christophe Jaffrelot, says Considering that he had not been supported enough by the Prime Minister, Ambedkar sent him his letter of resignation from his government on 27 September. This seems important, that the attempt to pass the civil code led to the resignation of Ambedkar. Ambedkar resigned in 1951. The last paragraph says Thus, a lesser version of this bill was passed by the parliament in 1956 [...] It was decided to add the implementation of a uniform civil code in Article 44 of the Directive principles of the Constitution specifying, "The State shall endeavour to secure for citizens a uniform civil code throughout the territory of India." So this directive was added after Ambedkar resigned as law minister and there was a new law minister? Please see if this needs to be clarified in short inline.
Citation 22, the citation following [...] specifying, "The State shall endeavour to secure for citizens a uniform civil code throughout the territory of India."; please add citation detailing.
Please add a one word or short inline description of who she is if possible — Aparna Mahanta.

Later years and Special Marriage Act

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Significance of Shah Bano case

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Current status and opinions

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Legal status and prospects

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Images

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References

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Spelling

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Copyright

Earwigs catches two references for copyright — 1 & 2. These have been checked against the history of the article. They are a case of text being copied from Wikipedia.

DTM (talk) 08:00, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]