Talk:2019 Marrakesh ePrix/GA1
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Reviewer: Usernameunique (talk · contribs) 06:26, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
Background
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Practice
- The first sentence of the second paragraph is confusing, and a bit of a run-on; splitting it in two might clear things up.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
- It's still the same. --Usernameunique (talk) 02:05, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
- Done MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
Qualifying
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Race
Each driver was mandated to activate the attack mode system twice
— Were they required to use it twice, or simply permitted to use it up to twice?- Yes drivers were required by regulations to use it a certain number of times as determined by Formula E themselves. MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
Vergne lunged at Bird
— "lunged" sounds odd.- Rewritten MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
without losing a large amount of time during activation
— How would attack mode cause one to lose time?- Because that is the nature of attack mode that it will lose a driver time because it is off the racing line and plays a part in a team's strategy during the race. MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
on the straight linking turns turn and eleven
— Something's off here.he fell to seventh behind López on the next lap
— Who fell to seventh?- Sam Bird MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
All drivers, except for Sims and di Grassi, activated their second attack modes three minutes later in anticipation the safety car would be withdrawn later than planned than had been anticipated by the remainder of the field. It proved to be so as the safety car stayed on the track until 20 seconds were left and Sims and di Grassi used their second attack modes beforehand.
— This is somewhat confusing (why would they activate the attack mode while the safety car was on the track? Wouldn't they not be able to benefit from it?) and needs some revision (e.g., "than planned than had been anticipated").- Drivers were allowed in that season to activate attack mode while the safety car was on track and they can either benefit or lose out depending how long the safety car is on track for MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
- So it sounds like when the safety car came out, seven minutes remained for everyone to use attack mode one more time. All but two drivers used it with four minutes to go; what does it mean that they "anticipat[ed] the safety car would be withdrawn later than had been anticipated by the remainder of the field"? It sounds like (almost) the entire field anticipated the same thing. And what was the point of using it then—can you talk me what they were trying to achieve by using it then? Also, I think you're missing a citation for these sentences—the one used doesn't talk about the strategy or di Grassi, although I see some on Google that mention both. --Usernameunique (talk) 02:22, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
- Drivers were allowed in that season to activate attack mode while the safety car was on track and they can either benefit or lose out depending how long the safety car is on track for MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
- Was the race scheduled to last for a certain amount of time (e.g., a 30-minute race), or laps (e.g., a 20-lap race)?
- 45 minutes plus one extra full lap of the track to be competed after time has elapsed MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
- I'd add that to the beginning of the section. --Usernameunique (talk) 02:22, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
- 45 minutes plus one extra full lap of the track to be competed after time has elapsed MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
Post-race
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Overall
- MWright96, comments above. --Usernameunique (talk) 06:26, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
- @Usernameunique: Have made changes to the article and have replied where appropriate MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
- MWright96, couple replies above. --Usernameunique (talk) 02:22, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
- @Usernameunique: Have made changes to the article and have replied where appropriate MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)