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 Public Speaking

  • The first paragraph of the Overview section does not have a citation.
  • Information is dated in the Overview section, specifically referencing the statistic about jobs that require public speaking.
  • History section is lacking citations.
  • The 12th citation has a broken/missing link.

Introduction

This is my sandbox! The article I am working on, Display Rules, is currently submitted as a draft!

I plan to revise the Display Rules article by removing the bias that the article is written with. I also plan to work to eradicate the personal reflection or opinion like essay format it is written with. Wikipedia articles should be written without personal feelings towards a topic, and should be viewed objectively, not subjectively. In addition, I plan to contribute to the article more and possibly develop more subtopics as a result of the minimum amount of information the article has. Furthermore, every reliable Wikipedia article needs citations and references. I will commit extensive research in finding verifiable resources to support the information in this article.

- The article is written with a essay-like tone, meaning it shows emotion from the author.

- The entire second paragraph does not have any citations.

- Multiple paragraphs completely paraphrase sentences from book publishings and websites without giving any credit to the source.

- For the second paragraph, beginning two sentences, I was able to successfully find the reference of where the information came from: Psychology, Perspectives and Connections, 2nd Edition by Gregory J. Feist. However, the information was taken verbatim from the source, which is plagiarism.

My Draft

Before:

Display rules are a social group's informal norms about when, where, and how one should express emotions. They can be described as culturally prescribed rules that people learn early on in their lives by interactions and socializations with other people.

Expressions of emotions vary to a great degree and hold significant meaning with great value of determining one's cultural and social identity. Display rules identify these expressions to a precise situation in a suitable context. Developmental research according to Matsumoto has revealed that display rules become differentiated with age and the presence of another individual has been shown to inhibit both posed and spontaneous expressions. Most of these expressions, whether posed or spontaneous, are adopted by the socially and cultured environment which they have derived. Matsumoto refers to display rules as values concerning the appropriateness of emotional displays that are communicated from one generation to the next. However, display rules necessitate the integration not only of a dimension of expression appropriateness, but an evaluation of behavioral responses relative to appropriateness. This connotation examined reflects not exactly the disparity of display rules, but inherited distinction in the sense of an assortment of contexts and situations.

The understanding of display rules is a complex, multifaceted task. Display rules are understood differentially depending upon their mode of expression (verbal/facial) and the motivation for their use (prosocial/self-protective). Display rules have become not only emotional expressivity, but guidelines that are culture specific, to be unified socially and in a conforming consensus to cultural norms. As the complexity of our society broadens so does our expressivity to an assortment of emotions, which have now become more learned than developed. A way of learning when and how to express or regulate certain emotions is based on cultural, gender, and social demands.

After:

Display rules are a social group's informal norms about when, where, and how one should express emotions.[1] They can be described as culturally prescribed rules that people learn early on in their lives by interactions and socializations with other people.[2] Because display rules vary greatly across cultures, there is no standard set for display rules. In addition to the cultural aspect, display rules also vary in high-contact cultures, and low-contact cultures.[3]

The way in which emotions are conveyed differ substantially between people in different contexts. These unique emotional displays can help deduce a person's self and culture. These emotions are able to be pinpointed to a certain behavior in a certain environment.[4] In the presence of others, one's way of behaving may be skewed due to the specific context that they are in. This may vary from person to person, and may run in families.[5]

The understanding of display rules is a complex, multifaceted task. Display rules are understood differentially depending upon their mode of expression (verbal/facial) and the motivation for their use (prosocial/self-protective). 

My edits

  • I added a citation to the third sentence and also paraphrased the sentence. The entire sentence was written verbatim, so I rewrote it, as well as added the citation that it was missing.
  • I added a sentence to the end of the first paragraph that says "Because display rules vary greatly across cultures, there is no standard set for display rules. In addition to the cultural aspect, display rules also vary in high-contact cultures, and low-contact cultures," and also added a citation to it.
  • I deleted the portion in paragraph 2 that says "However, display rules necessitate the integration not only of a dimension of expression appropriateness, but an evaluation of behavioral responses relative to appropriateness. This connotation examined reflects not exactly the disparity of display rules, but inherited distinction in the sense of an assortment of contexts and situations," because there was absolutely no citation available.
  • I deleted the portion in paragraph 3 that says "Display rules have become not only emotional expressivity, but guidelines that are culture specific, to be unified socially and in a conforming consensus to cultural norms. As the complexity of our society broadens so does our expressivity to an assortment of emotions, which have now become more learned than developed. A way of learning when and how to express or regulate certain emotions is based on cultural, gender, and social demands." I deleted this because it is not only written in a very biased way, using personal assumptions that may not true for everyone. In addition, there was no citation whatsoever.
  • I deleted this portion "Culture has a way in giving support to wishes, desires, and individual needs. Unique individuals within cultures acquire differences affecting displays of emotions emphasized by one's status, role, and diverse behaviors. These factors contribute to cultural variability and salient dimensions which capitalize the importance of developed displays of emotions." This was written like a personal reflection paper on display rules. There was no citations either.
  • Edited the line in paragraph 2 that says "Developmental research according to Matsumoto has revealed that display rules become differentiated with age and the presence of another individual has been shown to inhibit both posed and spontaneous expressions. Most of these expressions, whether posed or spontaneous, are adopted by the socially and cultured environment which they have derived. Matsumoto refers to display rules as values concerning the appropriateness of emotional displays that are communicated from one generation to the next." to "In the presence of others, one's way of behaving may be skewed due to the specific context that they are in. This may vary from person to person, and may run in families."
  • I took out the beginning sentence that said "Developmental research according to Matsumoto" and instead added the citation to the end of the sentence.

Before

  1. Expressions of emotions vary to a great degree and hold significant meaning with great value of determining one's cultural and social identity. Display rules identify these expressions to a precise situation in a suitable context.
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  3. However, display rules necessitate the integration not only of a dimension of expression appropriateness, but an evaluation of behavioral responses relative to appropriateness. This connotation examined reflects not exactly the disparity of display rules, but inherited distinction in the sense of an assortment of contexts and situations.
  4. Display rules have become not only emotional expressivity, but guidelines that are culture specific, to be unified socially and in a conforming consensus to cultural norms. As the complexity of our society broadens so does our expressivity to an assortment of emotions, which have now become more learned than developed. A way of learning when and how to express or regulate certain emotions is based on cultural, gender, and social demands.
  5. Culture has a way in giving support to wishes, desires, and individual needs. Unique individuals within cultures acquire differences affecting displays of emotions emphasized by one's status, role, and diverse behaviors. These factors contribute to cultural variability and salient dimensions which capitalize the importance of developed displays of emotions.
  6. Developmental research according to Matsumoto has revealed that display rules become differentiated with age and the presence of another individual has been shown to inhibit both posed and spontaneous expressions. Most of these expressions, whether posed or spontaneous, are adopted by the socially and cultured environment which they have derived. Matsumoto refers to display rules as values concerning the appropriateness of emotional displays that are communicated from one generation to the next.

After

  1. The way in which emotions are conveyed differ substantially between people in different contexts. These unique emotional displays can help deduce a person's self and culture. These emotions are able to be pinpointed to a certain behavior in a certain environment.[4]
  2. Because display rules vary greatly across cultures, there is no standard set for display rules. In addition to the cultural aspect, display rules also vary in high-contact cultures, and low-contact cultures.[3]
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  6. In the presence of others, one's way of behaving may be skewed due to the specific context that they are in. This may vary from person to person, and may run in families.[5]
  1. ^ Siegler, Robert (2006). How Children Develop: Exploring Child Develop Student Media Tool Kit & Scientific American Reader to Accompany How Children Develop. New York: Worth Publishers. ISBN 0-7167-6113-0.
  2. ^ Safdar, Saba; Matsumoto, David (2009). "Variations of Emotional Display Rules Within and Across Cultures: A Comparison Between Canada, USA, and Japan" (PDF). Canadian Journal of Behavioural Science. doi:10.1037/a0014387. Retrieved 4-16-15. {{cite journal}}: Check date values in: |access-date= (help)
  3. ^ a b McCornack, Steven (2015). Choices & Connections: An Introduction to Communication. Boston: Bedford/St.Martin's. p. 141. ISBN 1-319-04352-6.
  4. ^ a b Feist, Gregory (2011). Psychology, Perspectives and Connections. McGraw-Hill. ISBN 978-0078035203.
  5. ^ a b Matsumoto, David (November 3, 1990). "Cultural Similarities and Differences in Display Rules" (PDF). Motivation and Emotion. 14.
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