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Reviewer: MPJ-DK (talk · contribs) 12:51, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I am about to start reviewing this article. Disclaimer, I am part of the GA cup and I know next to nothing about decompression other than it involves people getting wet ;-) but that also allows me to take an outsider's view of the article to ensure it's a Good Article for all audiences, not just those that already know a lot about the subject.  MPJ-US  12:51, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking this on, however after about 4 months of waiting, I now have 3 articles simultaneously in GA review, and a business trip next week where I may be cut off from the net for a few days, so things may appear to go a bit slowly at times. I will do what I can. Cheers, • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 17:20, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
I believe the saying is "Feast or famine", nothing for months and now all at once. No worries I will work with you on the timing etc. we'll get it figured out. MPJ-US  21:08, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Okay let's start with the obvious - the GA Toolbox resources

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This is not entirely consistent with MoS, which as far as I understand it, only requires no-break spaces when the unit is an abbreviation. I left a massage about this on the peer review talk page, but apparently there is no-one available to fix it. I will ensure that all abbreviated units get a no-break space. Cheers, • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 17:20, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Done all that I found, but may have missed one or two. Please feel free to either fix or point out any I have missed. • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 20:41, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • The tool calls out "Please make the spelling of English words consistent with either American or British spelling, depending upon the subject of the article." Please let me know which version is the correct intended version so I can highlght any issues with this
Lets make it British English, though I am South African and not fussy on this point. I tend to rely on my browser spellchecker. • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 17:20, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Per WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) may be too long – consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per Wikipedia:Summary style
OK, I will see what looks reasonable. If you have any specific recommendations go ahead and recommend. • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 17:20, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
I have limited TOC to level 3 headers, which seems to work quite well in this case.• • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 20:12, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Copyvio Detector
  • Green tickY comes back as "unlikely" so that's a positive
Disambig Links
  • Green tickY no problems
External links
  • Source #9 is dead
I will try to fix. • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 17:20, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 20:22, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link at suunto.com is dead
I will try to fix. • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 17:20, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Source 20, 22 and the "sciencemag.org" links come back with a change to the url, to prevent link rot I suggest those get updated
I will see what I can do. • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 17:20, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • The stacks.iop.org link in #19 requires subscription, I believe that can be indicated in the citation template.
New one to me, How should that be done? • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 17:20, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • 18, 19, 44, 48, 50, 81, 82 and 87 have bare urls showing in the citations, that should be fixed
OK • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 17:20, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Suggestons from delldot

These were on the talk page, I agree with them.

  • In the bulleted time line, choose either present tense (e.g. "Thalmann extends use of E-L model"), past tense ("Dr. Andrew Smith first used the terms"), or noun construction ("Introduction of recompression tables") and stick with one throughout.
Looks like a reasonable thing to do. I will start soon. • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 17:20, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Done. • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 19:50, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Define uncommon terms inline (e.g. "supersaturation") or at least link to articles on them.
OK, Please let me know if I miss any. • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 17:20, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Rephrase: "A large number of decompression experiments were performed" it should be a large number was but that sounds weird.
I will take a look.• • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 17:20, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Changed. • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 19:54, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

General stuff

There is an "External links" section but no content? how about just removing it?

OK • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 17:20, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Someone beat me to it. Thanks, whoever it was. • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 20:02, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

More to come as I work through this article MPJ-US  13:10, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

General Reviews

  • "These bubbles and products of" - should have a comma after "bubbles"
  • "well tested" should be "well-tested"
  • "but in later experiments signs of what" - should have a comma after "experiments"
  • Typo - decmpression
  • "low risk" should be "low-risk"
  • Line starting with 1660, should be "predated"
  • Line starting with 1847 should be "the treatment"
  • 1868 - Should be "sponge diver's"&
  • 1873 - to match tense I would think it should be "sickness was caused"?
  • Is there a link for the term "perfusion"?
  • 1927 - "At that time" instead of "at this time,"
  • 1965 - don't think the "A" should be capitalised
  • 1965 - reads like a massive run-on sentence. Revise it and possibly break it down into 2-3 sentences
  • Possible links for "isobaric" and "counterdiffusion"?
  • 1976 - tense "can detect" should be "could detect"
  • 1983 - "altitude diving, and", no comma needed
  • CCR abbreviation is not explained
  • Link for "Nitrox"?
  • 2007 "indirectly affect risk of" should be "indirectly affect the risk of"
  • "bubble formation, while minimising decompression time" does not need the comma
  • "of compartments, range of half times" should be "of compartments, the range of half times"
  • The section "Theory" could be intergrated with the previous section, making it less choppy
  • Same with "Experimental Work"
  • "logarithmic curve, and is" does not need the comma
  • Some of the various table sections are quite short and their volume increase the TOC sigificantly, could some be combined
  • What is "FSW" an abbreviation for?
  • "half time" should be "half-time"
  • There are several bullet lists in those sections, can they be rewritten as prose?
  • first time PFM is used it should be spelled out.
  • "Addition of longer half-time" should be "The addition of longer half-time"
  • MSW should be spelled out first time it's used
  • " the actual depth for the two lower altitude tables" should be " the actual depth used for the two lower altitude tables"
  • "120 minute" should be "120-minute"
  • "In the early 1950s Hempleman developed" should be "In the early 1950s, Hempleman developed"
  • "modified Hempleman tissue slab model, and" should be "modified Hempleman tissue slab model and"
  • "RNPL tables were used by the British Sub-Aqua Club" should be "was used" since it reflects back to "a version"
  • "parallel models, and assume that" - does not need the comma
  • "ambient partial pressures, and is" - does not need the comma
  • "Thus diving situations" shold be "Thus, diving situations"
  • "consistent with accidental production of arterial bubbles" should be "consistent with the accidental production of arterial bubbles"
  • PFO needs to be spelled out first time it's used
  • "reached a critical size, when they are" does not need the comma
  • "associated to a corrective" should be "associated with a corrective"
  • "During gas uptake tissue" should be "During gas uptake, tissue"
  • Typo "Algotithm"
  • Typo "compertments"
  • "RNPL/BSAC tables, when the Club wanted" does not need the comma
  • "as it are considered" should be "as it is considered"
  • Link or explanation for in vivo?
  • "provided by elastic surface layer" either needs "a" or "the" before elastic.
  • Citation needed tag after "grow during decompression"
  • "In effect this is equivalent" should be "In effect, this is equivalent"
  • I believe "bubble-formation" should be "bubble formation"
  • Typo "dissolyed"
  • Typo "ceofficents"
  • Link for "Heliox"?
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