Talk:Mathematics and architecture/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 04:26, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

This is something new to me and a truly interesting topic. Will snatch this! Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 04:26, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

Many thanks for taking this on.

Lead

• "Buildings" is linked twice. Do we really need a link for this? Even if this is an architecture-related article?

Removed one.

• " Islamic architecture" is also linked twice

Done.

• One may not understand spatial forms at once.

Tweaked wording; not really avoidable in architecture.

• from the Pythagoreans onwards How long ago would that be?

Done.

• You may link "mausoleum", "hyperbolic"

Done.

• conveying a message about Hindu cosmology Leaves the reader wondering what the message would be. Could you add a word or two on that? Else remove it and mention it only in the main text.

Done; the word is already in the main text.

• What does "secular" convey here? In whose opinion are they so?

Removed.

• I wonder if this needs AE or BE. We have instances of both in the article. An FAC issue, though ...

Let's leave it.

• Ancient Rome "A" needs no caps if "ancient Egypt/Greece" don't do either. Same in "Connected fields" section

Let's use Title Case throughout.

• At the end of the nineteenth century Put it in either words or digits throughout the article. Elsewhere you say 21st, not words.

Let's do words throughout.

Connected fields

• I think this section should be called "Connection between fields"

We are in "Maths and Architecture", so we are talking about fields connected to that.

• Michael Ostwald and Kim Williams Who are they? You can add the author info from the cited source.

Glossed.

• connected, architecture I think we need a semicolon or hyphen here

Reworded.

• architecture being a profession concerned with the practical matter of making buildings, mathematics being the pure study of number and other abstract objects I think we can use "while on the other hand" or something to bring out the contrast more effectively. Commas seem lackluster.

Reworded.

• being the pure study of number Number"s"?

Number is right. Linked.

• the extra syllabus became the quadrivium of arithmetic, geometry, music and astronomy Should this rather be "the quadrivium of arithmetic, geometry, music and astronomy became the extra syllabus"?

Done.

• among architects, namely to be Colon?

Done.

• Link antiquity, geometry (only at first mention, presently linked at the second one), grammar, logic

Done.

Vitruvius

• I think conversion templates should be used wherever possible throughout "Harmonious spatial forms"

Done.

• The influential Ancient Roman architect Vitruvius Vitruvius should be identified in the earlier section.

I think he's quite well defined there by what he said.

• such as a temple depended on two qualities I think we should say "depends". It is a general truth in Vitruvius's opinion, we are merely stating that.

Done.

• on two qualities, symmetria and proportion I think "proportion" should come before "Symmetria". That is alphabetical and also the order in which you put the definitions.

Done.

• Basilica at Fano Links?

Done.

• firmness, usefulness and delight Could these be discussed in an alphabetical order?

This is the order described by Vitruvius.

• What is an "oculus"?

Linked. It's already glossed as "to let in light".....

• There are seven types of room...two squares If both refs. 26 and 27 support this quote then both should be placed just before the quote.

Done.

Twentieth century

• Too common to be linked: circular, nature

Done.

• "Modern Architecture" does not need italics

Done.

• Guggenheim Museum, Bilbao Links?

Done.

• leading architects Such as?

Reworded.