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Reviewer: Noleander (talk · contribs) 15:42, 21 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hi. I can do this review. Can the nominator please reply and confirm that they are still interested in working on the article? --Noleander (talk) 15:42, 21 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from reviewer

  • Lead: must mention the more commonly-use "Level 1 to 5" hurricane intensity scale: compare and contrast with Dvorak (because readers, at least in US, will have heard the 1-to-5 frequently in the news reports)
    • The table below compared the T numbers used in the Dvorak scale to hurricane categories. I don't see why we'd need to add this sort of information into the lead. The lead is meant to be a broad summary of the article below. Thegreatdr (talk) 21:06, 21 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Lead: Must explain if hurricanes are included or not
    • I believe I have now addressed this. Remember that we can't introduce POV into the article, so I've tried to use more global terms. Tropical cyclones include TD, TS, and HU/TY/Intense TC intensities explicitly. Thegreatdr (talk) 21:09, 21 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Footnote in lead: Why is footnote #1 in the lead section? footnotes are optional there, and all material in lead is supposed to also be in the body (where the footnote should normally be placed).
  • No need to measure wind speed (fly aircraft into?) - I don't see a comparison of Dvorak vs other intensity schemes which require measuring wind speed. I would think that a HUGE point is that the DT is much simpler/cheaper/safer than flying a plane into a hurricane, etc. Maybe there could be an entire section in the article on "DT contrasted with other estimation approaches" or similar. I see that the section "Evolution" mentions a few other techniques: consider re-casting that section to be "other techniques" section.
  • Define: "1-min Winds" in table: needs explanation
  • Newer picture? - The chart at top of article looks important historically: the original 1973 technique. But its a bit crude. Doesn't the NOAA have a newer, updated version (public domain) that is cleaner & updated? The could both be in the article.
    • The last paper by Dvorak in the public domain is from 1984. Wikipedia does normally demand original sources. I have uploaded the two images on the right from the 1984 paper
      Option 1
      Option 2
      . An improvement from your perspective? Thegreatdr (talk) 21:24, 21 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ambiguous: section title "Evolution" is ambiguous: does it mean evolution of the creation of the technique? or evolution of a cyclone as it develops? See also note above about changing the Ev section to be "comparison with other techniques"
  • Letter classification V -Z : The chart at top shows five different development lifespans: V to Z. Those needs to be explained in the article.
  • I'll pause for now. Go ahead and address the above as you see fit, then notify me on my talk page, and I'll do some more.
  • Okay, your recent changes are looking great. Here are a few more thoughts:
  • Wording: "...use of the Dvorak technique has been to provide a more ..." - Passive grammar. Try " technique is that it provides a more .."
  • Wording: "Some tropical cyclones do fluctuate in ..." - Better as " Some tropical cyclones fluctuate in ..."

End comments from Noleander. --15:46, 21 November 2012 (UTC)