Talk:Windows Server 2012/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ErrantX (talk · contribs) 08:45, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I am happy to review this. Upon a first pass I think it needs a little work to hit GA status, I will leave some comments below and go through the prose later:

The lead is very short of an article of this length and does not actually cover very much of the actual article content. See WP:LEAD
Similarly, material exists in the lead that does not appear to be covered in the article. So that all needs some work (some sort of introductory section could use most of the lead, and let you rewrite the whole lead).
I don't see any reaction/reviews or response, merely technical details. Although fairly new, such coverage should exist - e.g. this example.

I'll place the article on hold for the time being --Errant ^(chat!) 08:45, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

All understood, except the part "some sort of introductory section could use most of the lead, and let you rewrite the whole lead)".--Jasper Deng (talk) 04:33, 25 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, I just meant that the material currently in the lead should be in the history section and all of that then summarised as part of a new lead. Make more sense? --Errant ^(chat!) 10:30, 25 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

A more detailed review of the current prose:

History

build; does this word need explaining on first use (not sure)
was reportedly leaked to file-sharing sites in ; is WinRumours a RS? Also, that source is the one doing reporting - so "reportedly" seems to be editorialising.
window style; this could be confusing (window vs. Windows). If I understand it right this relate to Metro, so perhaps bring the Metro comments up to here, explain what it is, and say that this was the first look
Most of the first paragraph appears to lack any source!
[1] goes to a 404 page, and is probably not a reliable source anyway.
Naming section is rather short - it also seems like the original name should be noted at the beginning of the history section.

Features

Windows Server 2012 includes a number of new features or feature changes.; what purpose does this sentence serve? Can it be expanded on (perhaps with critical coverage to the overall feature-set).
Server Manager has been redesigned with an emphasis on easing management of multiple servers.; what is server manager? Also, sounds like marketing release :D consider rewording.
Server Core mode'; details of this mode??
There is also command auto-completion; sentence fragment, consider revising.

More later. I hope I am not being too harsh here - I'd say the core of the article is there, it just needs finesse. --Errant ^(chat!) 10:30, 25 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]