Talk:Lily van Java

Lily van Java is currently a Theatre, film and drama good article nominee. Nominated by — Crisco 1492 (talk) at 08:36, 21 August 2012 (UTC)

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GA Review

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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 05:01, 23 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one. Cheers, TBran dl ey 05:01, 23 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox: Add actors per production section
- Not done exactly as you suggested, but noted
Lede: film. En-dash should be em-dash after that "film"
- Either is acceptable, per WP:MDASH.
Lede: "Details on its cast and performance are contradictory, although the film is recognised as the first of a long series of ethnic Chinese-produced films in the country". Any reference?
- In #Release and reception, but I'll cite as well.
Lede: "It is likely lost." → "It is likely a lost film."
- Done
Premise: Wow, very small. Any way of expanding?
- I'll take another look, but I don't have high hopes. Pareh had the same issue.
  - Nothing in Biran or Said; Biran just adds "the film had a simple story and showed a lot of tennis" and Said quotes an earlier work by Biran which says the same thing.
Production: Missing comma before "respectively"
- Done.
Production: "General Motors" is missing "(GM)" at the end, as per MOS:ACRO
- Not done, as the acronym is not actually used.
References: "Footnotes" and "Bibliography" should be actual sub-sections per MOS:ACCESS.
- Done.

Though the article is small, because its lost, its still pretty solid. That's all above. On hold for now. TBran dl ey 02:21, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

OK. This article looks good. It'll pass. Congrats. TBran dl ey 14:02, 25 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review! — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:06, 25 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]