Talk:Handloading/GA1
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Reviewer: Handschuh-talk to me 09:03, 14 November 2010 (UTC)
This is my first attempt at an Good Article review so here goes;
- The sub heading Legal aspects/Situation in Germany deviates from manual of style with respect to references and wording (e.g. "As an example for a european country...", reference to DEVA website, etc.) This section also has spelling/grammar issues (e.g. capital 'E' for European, etc.) German terms with their English translations are formatted inconsistently (e.g. "Beduerfnispruefung" in both brackets and quotes next to it's English translation but "Deutsche Versuchs- und Prüfanstalt für Jagd- und Sportwaffen (DEVA)" in quotes next to its English translation in brackets.
- Personal pronouns are still being used (e.g. "he can apply for a permit...")
- The subheading Bullets/Purchased Bullets still has no references.
- Overall, article still reads like a manual in heading/subheading structure, especially the subheadings Materials Required, Reloading Process and Accuracy Tips.
Placing a hold on this one pending a response to the above issues. Handschuh-talk to me 09:03, 14 November 2010 (UTC)