Talk:Causing a Commotion

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Reviewer: Gongshow ^Talk 03:24, 27 May 2010 (UTC) GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria[reply]

Very nice article. Everything looks good except for some minor issues regarding the prose, which I've detailed below.

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:
~~In the lead, "dancey" seems a bit jargony. Perhaps "dance-oriented" works just as well.~~

Also in the lead, "Contemporary as well as old critics gave a mixed review of the song" is awkward - "old critics" makes me wonder if they are senior citizens, and "a mixed review" should be made plural. I recommend changing the sentence to something like, "Since its release, the song has received mixed reviews by critics."

In the "Background" section, "their continuous tumultous relationship" ... "continuous" suggests the tumult was literally non-stop with with zero breaks or interruptions. I recommend changing to "their often tumultuous relationship".

Also in the "Background" section, "In the United States, 'Causing a Commotion' was released in the autumn of 1987." I would substitute "autumn" with the exact month, if possible.

"In the United Kingdom, the song was released just before the commencement of Madonna's 1987 Who's That Girl Tour." When was that?

In the "Composition" section, "The lyrics knowingly makes a reference to 'get into the groove'". I assume this means there is a reference to her earlier single "Into the Groove", but this is unclear as it's currently written.

In the "Critical response" section, "Tony Power from Blender criticized the song." What did he criticize about it?

It sounds odd to have a quote credited to two people (Allen Metz and Carol Benson) - "I recall my stunned admiration as I sat in the theater in 1987 and first experienced..." - which sounds as though it was said by one person. Can this be clarified?

In the "Chart performance" section, "It entered the UK Singles Chart at , and peaked at four." Entered at what position?

In the "Live performances" section, "The outfit she wore for the performance was described as the..." Described by whom?

~~B. MoS compliance:~~
~~In the "Chart performance" section, the numbers are inconsistently formatted: "forty-one" on the Billboard Hot 100, "top ten" of the chart, "90" in Canada, "66" in Germany, etc.~~
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Again, not much is needed to pass GA. Let me know if you have any questions. Gongshow ^Talk 03:24, 27 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the review. I went ahead and corrected all. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 03:53, 27 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

That was quick! Looks great, and I have passed the article. Congrats again on your terrific work. Gongshow ^Talk 07:25, 27 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]