Talk:Oops!... I Did It Again Tour

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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Oops!... I Did It Again World Tour/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Binksternet (talk) 17:02, 28 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

The readability index of this article is too high for most readers. Sentence structure is too long, in general.

Not enough attention is given to the opening acts. How were the acts received? Did any of them benefit from the exposure?

One spelling mistake: "broadcasted" is incorrect. The past tense of broadcast is broadcast.

Nothing is said of the backup band, the other dancers, the touring technical crew, the various local technical crews, the staging, the lighting, the sound system, the wardrobe and makeup people, the tour bus, the freight trucking, the airplanes—This was a tour, and thousands of people were involved. What microphones did she like? Was she ever late for a gig, or almost late? Did the show experience any serious misfires from pyro or equipment malfunctions? What were the differences between the various shows, if any?

No tour pix. :(

No comments from her sponsors. No comments from her producers.

I'm failing this GAN for major gaps in coverage. Binksternet (talk) 17:29, 28 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]