Talk:Java-class cruiser/GA1

GA review

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Nominator: GGOTCC (talk · contribs) 02:18, 23 May 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Parsecboy (talk · contribs) 12:37, 23 May 2025 (UTC)[reply]

The article was using short citations, and shouldn't have been changed per WP:CITEVAR
Several dupe links throughout the article - I recommend using User:Evad37/duplinks-alt to locate them

File:H.M. Java 1935-5 in Nederlands Indië.jpg - this needs to be vetted through OTRS if we're going to accept the uploader's claim
File:Hr. Ms. Sumatra VRIJ.jpg - we need the author to be able to determine when the photo entered the public domain. We also need to know how this is PD in the US (which would generally mean we need to see a pre-1930 date of publication)

"6.1 m (20 ft 0 in)" - fix the rounding
Boilers generate power, they don't consume it, so those should be listed in the Installed power field
"10 × Bofors 15.0 cm (5.9 in)" - fix the rounding
"7.5 cm (3.0 in) belt" - fix the rounding

"Both ships saw action during World War II. Java was in the East Indies when war broke out." - when? Don't assume readers know specifically when you're talking about
"Sumatra was in the Netherlands when the country was invaded by Germany," - also, when? And why is this after the bit about Java, given that it was well over a year earlier?
"and sunk as a breakwater off Normandy." - again, when?

Armed with ten Bofors Mk Six 15 cm (5.9 in) in single mounts" - 15 cm what?
More rounding issues here (same as above, but also "5.0 cm (2.0 in)" in a couple of places)
"three turbines supplied by 8 boilers" - all should be spelled out or numerals in the same sentence
link belt armor, funnel (ship), bulkhead (partition), conning tower, gun shield, flagship
"The design of De Ruyter formed the basis of the De Zeven Provinciën-class cruiser, intended to replace the older Javas sometime during the 1940s.[4]: 36–37 " - this is not exactly relevant to this article.

Wait, were the ships armed with Krupp guns or Bofors? The characteristics section only mentions Bofors, but then here we see mention of eight Krupp guns (I assume 15 cm SK L/45?)
Did speed and/or endurance change for Sumatra?
203 mm (8.0 in) - fix rounding

"3 twin 4 cm (1.6 in) Bofors guns, while Java had two." - as above, "3" and "two" should be parallel