Talk:Cobra Crack/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Aszx5000 (talk · contribs) 21:24, 25 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Arconning (talk · contribs) 17:33, 21 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I will be reviewing this, comments will probably be finished in the next 72 hours! Arconning (talk) 17:33, 21 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Aszx5000 Here are my comments for now. Hope they can be addressed! Arconning (talk) 14:04, 22 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much for that @User:Arconning, I have made them all with just one question on paraphrasing the quote from Trotter. Much appreciated. Aszx5000 (talk) 15:25, 22 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Prose and MoS

Lead and infobox

Remove sourcing for "Grade", "First ascent", and "First free ascent", as they are all mentioned in the body.

Done

Please mention the location of the climb in the body and source it there instead rather than the infobox.

Done

After repulsing many leading climbers – most notably by Swiss climber Didier Berthod in 2005 – Canadian climber Sonnie Trotter made the first free ascent in 2006. , replace repulsing with something more formal, then replace the endashes with commas.

Done

5.14b (8c) , add comma at the end.

Done

History

Wikipedia:Proseline. Probably integrate the years within the paragraph rather than at the starting point.

Done, I had to re-word the first paragraph's two lead sentences to make it flow

free the route, I'm guessing this refers to free climbing? Hyperlink if so. Also reword to "free climb the route".

Done, and hyperlinked

Route

The route has an abrasive surface, add comma at the end.

Done

circa 30 metres, circa 45 degrees, use a c. template.

Done

extremely difficult (and painful), remove parenthesis.

Done

The technical crux, is crux a climbing term? If so, hyperlink as well.

Done

In 2006, Trotter said: "The redpoint crux comes over the lip on a slippery side pull; the feet are next to nothing, and it takes momentum and a huge throw to latch the final edge, at which point you're about 15 to 20 feet about your last piece of gear—it's really exciting"., I think you should paraphrase the quote.

Not done, Trotter is a major figure in climbing, so I though it was good to quote his reaction, i.e. direct "from the horse's mouth" so to speak? If you feel strongly however I can paraphrase? thanks

That's fair.

Legacy

beautiful as ever"., put period within the quotes as it's stated as such in the source.

Done

Ascents

Would like to know why there are two 1sts mentioned.

Done, clarified that the first one was as a aid climbing route, but the rest are free climbing

Filmography

Year before role, "Documentary (2005), Director”. Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Lists of works#Filmographies

Done

Add endash at the end to break up notes. First Ascent: The Movie (2005), Peter Mortimer. Sender Films. ASIN B000IWPP4G. – Documentary with Didier Berthold.

Done

Images

Images have proper licenses, relevant.
Probably change the first image's caption to "Crack seen from the ground".

Done

Refs

Manual check, everything seems okay.
Earwig picks up quotes, pass.

Spotchecks

Random references check, 5, 14, 18, 24, all seem good.

Misc

No ongoing edit war, article is focused and broad on the topic being discussed.

Good Article review progress box

Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

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