Talk:Cobra Crack/GA1
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Nominator: Aszx5000 (talk · contribs) 21:24, 25 May 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Arconning (talk · contribs) 17:33, 21 June 2024 (UTC)
I will be reviewing this, comments will probably be finished in the next 72 hours! Arconning (talk) 17:33, 21 June 2024 (UTC)
- @Aszx5000 Here are my comments for now. Hope they can be addressed! Arconning (talk) 14:04, 22 June 2024 (UTC)
Prose and MoS
Lead and infobox
- Remove sourcing for "Grade", "First ascent", and "First free ascent", as they are all mentioned in the body.
- Please mention the location of the climb in the body and source it there instead rather than the infobox.
- After repulsing many leading climbers – most notably by Swiss climber Didier Berthod in 2005 – Canadian climber Sonnie Trotter made the first free ascent in 2006. , replace repulsing with something more formal, then replace the endashes with commas.
- 5.14b (8c) , add comma at the end.
History
- Wikipedia:Proseline. Probably integrate the years within the paragraph rather than at the starting point.
- free the route, I'm guessing this refers to free climbing? Hyperlink if so. Also reword to "free climb the route".
Route
- The route has an abrasive surface, add comma at the end.
- circa 30 metres, circa 45 degrees, use a c. template.
- extremely difficult (and painful), remove parenthesis.
- The technical crux, is crux a climbing term? If so, hyperlink as well.
- In 2006, Trotter said: "The redpoint crux comes over the lip on a slippery side pull; the feet are next to nothing, and it takes momentum and a huge throw to latch the final edge, at which point you're about 15 to 20 feet about your last piece of gear—it's really exciting"., I think you should paraphrase the quote.
Legacy
- beautiful as ever"., put period within the quotes as it's stated as such in the source.
Ascents
- Would like to know why there are two 1sts mentioned.
Filmography
- Year before role, "Documentary (2005), Director”. Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Lists of works#Filmographies
- Add endash at the end to break up notes. First Ascent: The Movie (2005), Peter Mortimer. Sender Films. ASIN B000IWPP4G. – Documentary with Didier Berthold.
Images
- Images have proper licenses, relevant.
- Probably change the first image's caption to "Crack seen from the ground".
Refs
- Manual check, everything seems okay.
- Earwig picks up quotes, pass.
Spotchecks
- Random references check, 5, 14, 18, 24, all seem good.
Misc
- No ongoing edit war, article is focused and broad on the topic being discussed.
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