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General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

18roo

Link to draft you're reviewing
User:18roo/Lateralization of brain function
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Lateralization of brain function

Evaluate the drafted changes

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Lead:

There is no lead section edited in this article.

Content:

There are good sources provided in the edits. However, some phrasing does not seem to flow well with the preexisting article. For example. In the first paragraph of your sandbox the following sentence does not quite seem to flow as well with the rest of the article "in both species of vertebrates and invertebrates lateralization can be found in many" The article may benefit from a readthrough to work out final kinks like this.

Tone and Balance: Throughout your edits to the article your tone seemed to stay very professional and academic. I would again mention that it may be beneficial to reread some portions to make sure they flow well together.

Sources and references:

Your sources are from reputable places, recent, and relevant to your topic. Good job!

Organization:

Your organization was well thought out in my opinion. It seemed like you thought through where your quotes and information would best fit in before you placed them.

Images and Media:

Photos were added in places where it made sense to have them. The images were also related to the topic.

Overall Impressions:

Overall I think you did a good job on your article edits. I think there are some areas that could benefit from a little bitof fine tuning in regards to flow. In these places it sounds choppy and out of place.