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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:58, 1 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

First review of the GAN backlog for me! --K. Peake 07:58, 1 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

  • List George Daniel and Matthew Healy by their full names under producers per Template:Infobox song
  • The writing and production sentence should be the second one of the lead instead
  • "The song was released on" → "It was released on"
  • Remove the names of the previous singles because that is irrelevant to the article, also the release date is not mentioned anywhere in the body; maybe add it at the start of reception and retitle to Release and reception?
  • Writing and production credits are not written directly in the lead but are sourced from personnel; try to write out somewhere like the opening section
  • "It was written by" → "The song was written by"
  • Maybe identify Guendoline Rome Viray Gomez by his stage name of No Rome to avoid confusion, as you use that later on?
  • "was handled by former two." → "was handled by the former two."
  • "The song's beat originated from" → "The beat originated from"
  • "during "Narcissist" (2018), the band's" → "during the recording of "Narcissist", the band's" to be specific; also, release years for songs are not notable for the lead
  • Remove wikilink on No Rome
  • It is not sourced in the body that they continued working on the beat with No Rome
  • "and synth-pop that" → "and synth-pop song that"
  • There are too many musical styles listed that the song draws from for the lead; cut down since it currently reads like a supermarket list here
  • Target bubblegum pop to Bubblegum music
  • Wikilink indietronica per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • Remove wikilink on Afropop
  • Same issue as I said with musical styles for the production info in the lead
  • Wikilink social media
  • Wikilink internet
  • Remove "achieved moderate success on worldwide music charts" since such language is not suitable for the lead; merge the previous parts of that sentence with the one about the UK/Scotland
  • Ireland position should come before the US one because the former is a main chart
  • Add the word chart after Billboard Hot Rock & Alternative Songs
  • Useless capitalisation for silver
  • "by the British Phonographic Industry," → "by the British Phonographic Industry (BPI)." and remove the sales amount, as that is not notable here
  • "and lip synching in front" → "and lip synching the song's lyrics in front"

Background and recording

  • Remove commas after around the album title
  • The year-end and decade rankings are not sourced  Done
  • "considered by various publications" → "while being considered by various publications"
  • Maybe mention in the A Brief Inquiry into Online Relationships sentence that the album includes "TooTimeTooTimeTooTime"?  Done
  • Annie Mac should be italicised per the article  Done
  • "condensing it into a" → "condensing the track into a"  Done
  • [13] should be solely at the end of the para because it backs up all of the last three sentences entirely  Done
  • "saying it didn't" → "saying it does not" since this is talking about the song itself, so use correct tense  Done
  • "and be enjoyable." → "and be enjoyable like he considers music to be "about at some point"." per source  Done

Music and lyrics

  • Audio sample looks good!
  • ""TooTimeTooTimeTooTime" is an" → "Musically, "TooTimeTooTimeTooTime" is an"  Done
  • "song built around a" → "song that is built around a"  Done
  • Where is the unique structure sentence sourced?
  • Remove target on pop  Done
  • "melodic production composed of" → "melodic production, composed of"  Done
  • Target chords to Chord (music)  Done
  • Target bubblegum pop to Bubblegum music  Done
  • Wikilink indietronica per MOS:LINK2SECT  Done
  • Where is the larger online world part sourced?
  • "missed phone calls, and" → "missed phone calls and" because the article is in British English  Done
  • "that the track: "captures" → "that the track "captures"  Done
  • Target retro to Retro style  Done
  • "of both autotune and" → "of both Auto-Tune on Healy's vocals and" to be specific per the source  Done
  • Identify Pyrour Stroud as being of Slant Magazine  Done
  • "calling the song a" → "with him calling the song a"  Done
  • Are No Ripcord really a reliable source; the majority of the team are contributors and anyone can fill in the application form?
  • "that the track: "looks" → "that the track "looks"  Done
  • "matter-of-fact indifference."" → "matter-of-fact indifference"." per MOS:QUOTE  Done

Reception

  • Retitle to Release and reception, adding the release date of the single as the opening sentence with a source  Done
  • Img looks good!
  • "of 2018, calling it" → "of 2018; Pryor Stroud called it"
  • Fix MOS:QUOTE issues throughout this section
  • The Ringer should not be italicised  Done
  • Mention the groove in comp too since that's notable
  • "on the album's core theme; relationships" → "on the album's core theme of relationships"  Done
  • "calling it: "their" → "calling it "their"  Done
  • "trends into the groups" → "trends into the 1975's"  Done
  • "deemed it the band's" → "deemed it their"  Done
  • "called the line" → "called the couplet"  Done
  • "all-time favourite lyrics." → "all-time favourite Healy lyrics."  Done
  • "highlighted the same line," → "highlighted the same couplet,"  Done
  • "saying: "The 1975 understand" → "saying that the 1975 "understand"  Done
  • Wikilink UK Singles Chart  Done
  • Ireland should come before the US chart position and then Sweden since they should be ordered geographically in the body  Done
  • Add the word chart after Billboard Hot Rock & Alternative Songs  Done
  • Useless capitalisation for silver and add BPI in brackets for the British Phonographic Industry  Done

Music video

  • I am confused about [47]; why does it say the video was for "Love It If We Made It" and not this song?
  • "on Spotify on 15 August." → "via Spotify on 15 August 2018." but the release date is not sourced for this one  Done
  • "on the group's" → "on the band's"  Done
  • The opening and lip sync parts are not sourced  Done
  • [20] is useless here due to saying nothing about the video
  • "the "colourful" backdrops" → "the colourful backdrops"  Done
  • "Well, The 1975 is" → "Well, [the band] is"  Done
  • The Fader review is not mentioned by the source, again  Done

Credits and personnel

  • Again, should No Rome be listed under his real name?

Charts

  • Good

Certifications

References

  • Copyvio score looks too high at 43.5%, but this is not due to parts actually quoted from Soundigest so it is ok
  • Top job with the archiving!
  • BBC → BBC Radio 1 on ref 1
  • Sony/ATV Music Publishing → Musicnotes.com on ref 19
  • Ref 30's archive does not work, so change to a different one
  • Are you sure about ref 35's reliability per my earlier comment?
  • Cite The Ringer as publisher instead for ref 36
  • You are supposed to cite artist parameter instead of date for ref 45
  • Good

Final comments and verdict

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