Talk:TooTimeTooTimeTooTime/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:58, 1 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

First review of the GAN backlog for me! --K. Peake 07:58, 1 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

List George Daniel and Matthew Healy by their full names under producers per Template:Infobox song
The writing and production sentence should be the second one of the lead instead
"The song was released on" → "It was released on"
Remove the names of the previous singles because that is irrelevant to the article, also the release date is not mentioned anywhere in the body; maybe add it at the start of reception and retitle to Release and reception?
Writing and production credits are not written directly in the lead but are sourced from personnel; try to write out somewhere like the opening section
"It was written by" → "The song was written by"
Maybe identify Guendoline Rome Viray Gomez by his stage name of No Rome to avoid confusion, as you use that later on?
"was handled by former two." → "was handled by the former two."
"The song's beat originated from" → "The beat originated from"
"during "Narcissist" (2018), the band's" → "during the recording of "Narcissist", the band's" to be specific; also, release years for songs are not notable for the lead
Remove wikilink on No Rome
It is not sourced in the body that they continued working on the beat with No Rome
"and synth-pop that" → "and synth-pop song that"
There are too many musical styles listed that the song draws from for the lead; cut down since it currently reads like a supermarket list here
Target bubblegum pop to Bubblegum music
Wikilink indietronica per MOS:LINK2SECT
Remove wikilink on Afropop
Same issue as I said with musical styles for the production info in the lead
Wikilink social media
Wikilink internet
Remove "achieved moderate success on worldwide music charts" since such language is not suitable for the lead; merge the previous parts of that sentence with the one about the UK/Scotland
Ireland position should come before the US one because the former is a main chart
Add the word chart after Billboard Hot Rock & Alternative Songs
Useless capitalisation for silver
"by the British Phonographic Industry," → "by the British Phonographic Industry (BPI)." and remove the sales amount, as that is not notable here
"and lip synching in front" → "and lip synching the song's lyrics in front"

Background and recording

Remove commas after around the album title
The year-end and decade rankings are not sourced
"considered by various publications" → "while being considered by various publications"
Maybe mention in the A Brief Inquiry into Online Relationships sentence that the album includes "TooTimeTooTimeTooTime"?
Annie Mac should be italicised per the article
"condensing it into a" → "condensing the track into a"
[13] should be solely at the end of the para because it backs up all of the last three sentences entirely
"saying it didn't" → "saying it does not" since this is talking about the song itself, so use correct tense
"and be enjoyable." → "and be enjoyable like he considers music to be "about at some point"." per source

Music and lyrics

Audio sample looks good!
""TooTimeTooTimeTooTime" is an" → "Musically, "TooTimeTooTimeTooTime" is an"
"song built around a" → "song that is built around a"
Where is the unique structure sentence sourced?
Remove target on pop
"melodic production composed of" → "melodic production, composed of"
Target chords to Chord (music)
Target bubblegum pop to Bubblegum music
Wikilink indietronica per MOS:LINK2SECT
Where is the larger online world part sourced?
"missed phone calls, and" → "missed phone calls and" because the article is in British English
"that the track: "captures" → "that the track "captures"
Target retro to Retro style
"of both autotune and" → "of both Auto-Tune on Healy's vocals and" to be specific per the source
Identify Pyrour Stroud as being of Slant Magazine
"calling the song a" → "with him calling the song a"
Are No Ripcord really a reliable source; the majority of the team are contributors and anyone can fill in the application form?
"that the track: "looks" → "that the track "looks"
"matter-of-fact indifference."" → "matter-of-fact indifference"." per MOS:QUOTE

Reception

Retitle to Release and reception, adding the release date of the single as the opening sentence with a source
Img looks good!
"of 2018, calling it" → "of 2018; Pryor Stroud called it"
Fix MOS:QUOTE issues throughout this section
The Ringer should not be italicised
Mention the groove in comp too since that's notable
"on the album's core theme; relationships" → "on the album's core theme of relationships"
"calling it: "their" → "calling it "their"
"trends into the groups" → "trends into the 1975's"
"deemed it the band's" → "deemed it their"
"called the line" → "called the couplet"
"all-time favourite lyrics." → "all-time favourite Healy lyrics."
"highlighted the same line," → "highlighted the same couplet,"
"saying: "The 1975 understand" → "saying that the 1975 "understand"
Wikilink UK Singles Chart
Ireland should come before the US chart position and then Sweden since they should be ordered geographically in the body
Add the word chart after Billboard Hot Rock & Alternative Songs
Useless capitalisation for silver and add BPI in brackets for the British Phonographic Industry

Music video

I am confused about [47]; why does it say the video was for "Love It If We Made It" and not this song?
"on Spotify on 15 August." → "via Spotify on 15 August 2018." but the release date is not sourced for this one
"on the group's" → "on the band's"
The opening and lip sync parts are not sourced
[20] is useless here due to saying nothing about the video
"the "colourful" backdrops" → "the colourful backdrops"
"Well, The 1975 is" → "Well, [the band] is"
The Fader review is not mentioned by the source, again

Credits and personnel

Again, should No Rome be listed under his real name?

Charts

Good

Certifications

See MOS:TABLECAPTION

References

Copyvio score looks too high at 43.5%, but this is not due to parts actually quoted from Soundigest so it is ok
Top job with the archiving!
BBC → BBC Radio 1 on ref 1
Sony/ATV Music Publishing → Musicnotes.com on ref 19
Ref 30's archive does not work, so change to a different one
Are you sure about ref 35's reliability per my earlier comment?
Cite The Ringer as publisher instead for ref 36
You are supposed to cite artist parameter instead of date for ref 45

External links

Good

Final comments and verdict

On hold until all of the issues are fixed, but I did not put reliable sources as y or n since I am not sure either way about ref 35. --K. Peake 11:47, 1 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]